Okay, I guess I should put in a little something about myself up here. I am 13 years old and you can Skype me at matthewalm.
I think that's all I need to put in here. I prefer to use chat, because my microphone is really bad.
Well, here is everything I have. I am done editing the storyboard, and all I'm going to work on now is the story itself. Storyboard.pdf
Here is the collaborative draft that 3 of us are working on (1 overall story, 3 perspectives) Story.pdf
Here is the final draft. I hope it is good enough (though I doubt it...)
-What areas of the story need the most improvement?
-Does the story flow clearly and logically?
-Do any word choices need changing?
- Are my descriptions complete and detailed?
Comments:
-Just wondering, where does your main character fit in from scene 1-3, who is todd? Is Todd, Olivia?- Now the name is Sela, but it is mentioned in my updatedstory.
-Do you have any descriptions of their past, what happened to the father?
-Besides that same thing the others wrote
I am thinking of leaving the father's description to the others. This concentrates solely on the mother and her oldest child.
I think that's all I need to put in here. I prefer to use chat, because my microphone is really bad.
Well, here is everything I have. I am done editing the storyboard, and all I'm going to work on now is the story itself.
Storyboard.pdf
Here is the collaborative draft that 3 of us are working on (1 overall story, 3 perspectives)
Story.pdf
Here is the final draft. I hope it is good enough (though I doubt it...)
-What areas of the story need the most improvement?
-Does the story flow clearly and logically?
-Do any word choices need changing?
- Are my descriptions complete and detailed?
Comments:
-Just wondering, where does your main character fit in from scene 1-3, who is todd? Is Todd, Olivia?- Now the name is Sela, but it is mentioned in my updated story.
-Do you have any descriptions of their past, what happened to the father?
-Besides that same thing the others wrote
I am thinking of leaving the father's description to the others. This concentrates solely on the mother and her oldest child.